Sunday, 26 April 2015

I Wrote...

And I wrote
The most heart-wrenching lines
That pierced my heart
Scarred my existence
Shattered my dreams
And trembled my body.

But I wrote
Those heart-wrenching lines
With trembling hands
Teary eyes
Racing heart
And throbbing head

“I loved him.
Sometimes, he loved me too!”

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29 comments:

  1. KParthasarathiApril 26, 2015 12:48 am

    Nicely written with the sting in the last line!

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  2. SGApril 26, 2015 1:12 am

    Nice poem. Last line "Sometimes, he loved me too". Sometimes means on again and off again? Or, Is it like, "almost pregnant"?

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    1. LocomenteMay 15, 2015 2:46 pm

      Sometimes meas on and off as you said.
      Thanks SG :)

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  3. Ankita April 26, 2015 11:14 am

    Lovely poem and last two lines...just b'ful!!

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  4. rudraprayagaApril 26, 2015 12:47 pm

    Very lovely lines.Now write about 'heartening lines about him.' (Joking only,Satya.)

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  5. Amrit SinhaApril 26, 2015 7:45 pm

    I seriously wish I had written this poem ... this is amazing ... just way too awesome !!!

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  6. Skincare VillaApril 27, 2015 11:15 am

    Last reveals the pain ( heart wrenching pain should I say) in the previous lines. Keep up! Nice composition!

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  7. Boisterous BeeApril 27, 2015 1:04 pm

    Wohoo.. what a poem.. and the ending was terrific..!!
    Well done..

    Cheers

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  8. NatašekApril 27, 2015 1:46 pm

    painful.. and you write it so good, that second verse..

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  9. totomaiApril 27, 2015 4:17 pm

    keyword : sometimes. it summarizes the situation.

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  10. Sumana RoyApril 27, 2015 8:42 pm

    I second totomai...what a twist!! very well written Satya...

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  11. Jannie FunsterApril 27, 2015 10:43 pm

    Another fan of how you brought in such an impactful ending. Good write.

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  12. brudbergApril 28, 2015 12:23 am

    Somehow it's those few moments of sometimes we live for isn't it?

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    1. LocomenteMay 15, 2015 2:51 pm

      Yeah, wells aid Bjorn...
      Those few moments only matter!

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  13. Gen Giggles April 28, 2015 2:19 am

    Sometimes isn't enough. Well done writing this

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  14. C.C.April 28, 2015 10:00 am

    Oooh, it's that one word, "Sometimes" that adds the sting to this!!

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  15. LocomenteMay 15, 2015 2:48 pm

    Yeah... The bitter truth!

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