Friday, 23 August 2013

Golden Years!!!

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They looked into each other’s eyes. There was a childish vigor and teenager’s naughtiness in them. After all, they had come back to a place that united them for eternity fifty years before and pronounced them as the man and wife!

They were childhood friends. Love blossomed during mid teens and seasoned with passage of time.

Now their children were married away and had nest of their own.

And now, they were enjoying second phase of young days. Reinventing each other... Exploring places... Sharing jokes... Revisiting past... And what not!


He held her hands and they walked towards the mansion...
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12 comments:

  1. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsAugust 23, 2013 2:51 pm

    Dear Satya,

    I loved "reinventing each other". A touching tale of the circle of life.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. LocomenteAugust 23, 2013 3:16 pm

      Thanks a lot Rochelle...
      For the comment and the prompt :)

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  2. AnonymousAugust 23, 2013 2:51 pm

    Dear Satya,

    This was a nice tale. You could 86 the 'whatnot'. (86 is an American slang for 'get rid of'. ) In your third paragraph you need an 'a' between the words had and nest. Beyond those two items there is a great deal of atmosphere and joy in your writing.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. LocomenteAugust 23, 2013 3:17 pm

      Thanks a lot for your constructive feedback...
      And thanks for dropping by :)

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  3. AnonymousAugust 23, 2013 9:05 pm

    Nice story Satya, I also loved the 'reinventing each other' line. :)

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  4. UnknownAugust 23, 2013 10:12 pm

    A great positive story.

    (Missing an "a" in the third para.)

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    1. LocomenteAugust 29, 2013 4:08 pm

      Thanks a lot!
      Ah! I will make the correction..
      Thanking you for the observation :)

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  5. AnonymousAugust 24, 2013 11:30 am

    What a wonderful thing to grow old together and act like teenagers. They still sound like they're in very much in love.

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  6. AnonymousAugust 25, 2013 12:41 pm

    This is a sweet story my one criticism would be the two lines that begin with "Now" and "And now".

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    1. LocomenteAugust 29, 2013 4:10 pm

      Ha! That's a nice observation...
      Thanks a lot :)

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