Thursday, 13 February 2014

Li'l Girl was Gone...


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he could not tolerate the pain anymore. The pain was injected by a realization and the retaliation bothered her heart. Heart, on the other hand, blurred her mind to accept the reality. The reality seemed surreal; so tears poured down her eyes. Her eyes continued to stare at the vacuum. Then, vacuum spread all through her body. Her body shivered. The shiver made her feel weak.  The weakness made her feel vulnerable. The vulnerability made her feel alone. Loneliness pricked her and she missed him.

Why did he love me? Why did he walk away? Why is he scared of commitment?

Unanswered questions haunted her.

She poured a glass of brandy and let the bitterness of the drink forget her bitter-sweet experiences that life threw at her.

The innocent mock-tail-loving li’l girl seemed to have lost…

And she didn’t attempt to retrieve her…



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24 comments:

  1. Amrit SinhaFebruary 13, 2014 10:52 am

    Heartbreaks can be painful ... but then, with time, things tend to get back to normal :-)

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    1. LocomenteFebruary 13, 2014 10:55 am

      Hopefully... But you never know...
      And sadly you will not be the same person anymore!

      Thanks Amrit :)

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  2. AnonymousFebruary 13, 2014 11:39 am

    A sad and painful story. Well written.

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  3. RajlakshmiFebruary 13, 2014 12:26 pm

    I loved how beautifully you have expressed the emotions. Sad yet wonderful write

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  4. AnonymousFebruary 13, 2014 10:26 pm

    Beautifully sad!

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  5. AtreyeeFebruary 14, 2014 12:15 am

    Only if we had all the answers-sigh!A bitter sweet tale of a love lost...

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  6. UnknownFebruary 14, 2014 1:36 am

    There's some real pain here.

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  7. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2014 4:58 am

    Nothing hurts like a broken heart.

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    1. LocomenteFebruary 14, 2014 11:18 am

      Also a heart that is reluctant to face the reality...
      Thanks :)

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    2. AnonymousFebruary 14, 2014 9:51 pm

      well said Satya.. if only heart ever listens to brain.. "dil to baccha hai ji" :)

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    3. LocomenteFebruary 17, 2014 11:30 am

      Really...
      If only...

      Thanks Kannappa :)

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  8. vijayavallabhuFebruary 14, 2014 6:56 pm

    With Time everything becomes past,Life is morw beautiful than the broken pieces of heart and hurt,Happy Valentines Day:)

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    1. LocomenteFebruary 17, 2014 11:25 am

      Time is a god healer they say...
      So may be yes...

      Thanks Vijaya :)

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  9. P.S. JoshiFebruary 14, 2014 7:30 pm

    I could feel the hurt being expressed. On a more hopeful note, Happy Valentine's Day.

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  10. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsFebruary 15, 2014 4:48 pm

    Dear Loco

    The pain in this piece is tangible. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. LocomenteFebruary 17, 2014 11:31 am

      Thanks Rochelle..
      For the comment and the prompt!

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  11. AnonymousFebruary 18, 2014 4:24 am

    I attempted to leave a comment before but it vanished in an instant! Well, I want you to know you are very talented and I enjoyed this technique of writing. It is almost like building a pyramid using a word from the previous sentence and using words as the mortar to write your piece. Very clever and good writing! Thank you so much! Nan Falkner

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    1. LocomenteFebruary 18, 2014 10:58 am

      Dear Nan Falkner,
      I am really glad that you are the first and only person to notice and appreciate the new cascading form of writing style I adopted here. I thank you heartily for that...

      Hoping to see you more around...

      Thanks :)

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