Thursday, 26 February 2015

Unusual Incident

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arrying a backpack, I saw her walking towards the railway track.

I have been staying in the verdant lane since the time I remember. I love the peacefulness and the sound of train disrupting the silence. I specifically adore it when I see children frantically waving at me. I wag back.

Generally, I don’t see any human beings striding along those railway lanes unless there is any breakdown.

But, when I saw her in that pathway, I knew something was wrong. I ran helplessly behind her.

However, she jumped on a running train and lay crushed in front me.

I barked. I howled.

PS: Thanks Rochelle for this wonderful image prompt!

PPS: I am here after a looooooooong time. Really missed you!!!
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22 comments:

  1. Destination InfinityFebruary 26, 2015 9:09 am

    Good twist, but some premise on why she wanted to jump might have helped.

    Destination Infinity

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    1. LocomenteFebruary 26, 2015 10:57 am

      Thanks a lot.
      But, the story is the point of view of an onlooker - the dog.
      So, I wanted to tell you only as much as the dog sees!

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  2. Afshan ShaikFebruary 26, 2015 10:02 am

    did she step on the track by mistake or was it intentional :( ?
    felt bad by the twist !

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    1. LocomenteFebruary 26, 2015 11:00 am

      Intentionally. That's why I say that " I knew something is wrong"

      Thanks Afshan :)

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  3. Pooja MahimkarFebruary 26, 2015 10:13 am

    dogs <3

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  4. Sandra CrookFebruary 26, 2015 3:30 pm

    Nice one. Welcome back.

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  5. AnonymousFebruary 26, 2015 6:47 pm

    Too bad she didn't see the dog, he would have stopped her. I love the pov.

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  6. AnonymousFebruary 26, 2015 7:17 pm

    view point of a dog! WoW! That's a first :D
    I like it :)

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  7. Keith's RamblingsFebruary 26, 2015 8:06 pm

    Oh dear. Good intentions, sad result.

    http://www.keithsramblings.blogspot.co.uk/2015/02/its-dogs-life.html

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  8. padmajaFebruary 27, 2015 4:10 am

    This is so touching. I could imagine the dog's soul breaking in to pieces as well.

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  9. Sindhu Devi KFebruary 27, 2015 3:22 pm

    Superb story expressing the intelligence of a dog even though the girl came to a bad end... Nicely woven... I am sure you need a lot of creativity to think what animals may think. TC! Keep smiling :)

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  10. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsMarch 01, 2015 6:06 am

    Dear Satya,

    Welcome back. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  11. UnknownMarch 01, 2015 6:37 pm

    I like the way you remind us that animals have instincts beyond sex and survival.
    (should it read 'something was wrong')

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