Wednesday, 18 September 2013

Fateful Stroke


At eighty two, Jonathan was unhappy.

His wife passed away soon after Joanne’s birth. Then he became their daughter’s mother and world.

 But his sudden stroke changed their lives forever.

Joanne was forced to take up their restaurant business and take care of her fragile father. She did all her chores with a smile. Her love helped him to recover.

But it was too late!

Joanne who was fourty five now was unmarried. Her selflessness made him restless.

As he passed along a mannequin wearing bridal outfit during an evening stroll, his heart pricked.

He wished he had died when stroke hit him...



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23 comments:

  1. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsSeptember 18, 2013 3:08 pm

    Dear Satya,

    First on the list today. A sad story indeed. On a practical note, it's spelled mannequin and you need an "an" before evening stroll.
    Unfortunately for some realization comes late in life or, worse, not at all. Nice one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. LocomenteSeptember 18, 2013 3:18 pm

      Dear Rochelle...

      Thanks for your gracious comments and wonderful prompt..
      I was too excited to post as the first person that I didnt re-read it...
      But I appreciate your observation...:)

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 18, 2013 5:57 pm

    It heartbreaking how a story about love can have such a sad ending.

    Just a note: you have Joanne twice earlier in the story, but Joanna near the end.

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    1. LocomenteSeptember 18, 2013 6:56 pm

      Thanks for your comment
      And wonderful observation :)

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  3. AnonymousSeptember 18, 2013 6:20 pm

    Hopefully there's still time for him to change his ways and show some love to his daughter, changing that sad ending to a happy one. Who knows? Stranger things have happened.

    janet

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    1. LocomenteSeptember 18, 2013 6:58 pm

      Lets hope so...

      But he does love his daughter..
      Its just that he was helplessly unwell throughout that phase of Joanne's life when she should have settled down in life...

      Thanks Janet

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  4. DobsonSeptember 18, 2013 7:16 pm

    I am sure there are so many who find themselves in this position late in life.

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  5. AnonymousSeptember 18, 2013 10:17 pm

    Ah! A sad tale that fits the picture really well. :D

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  6. Dana C ThomasSeptember 18, 2013 11:37 pm

    What a mournful wistful write. It seems Joanne inherited her selflessness from her father.

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    1. LocomenteSeptember 19, 2013 12:00 am

      Thanks Dana...
      I liked your perspective a lot...
      Something that even I didn't think of :)

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  7. AnonymousSeptember 19, 2013 9:50 am

    yes, sometimes the cost is too high!

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  8. UnknownSeptember 19, 2013 10:29 pm

    great feeling conveyed in this fiction
    the daughter needed her dad sad that he doesn't know that

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  9. AnonymousSeptember 20, 2013 2:45 am

    She watched her father grow old single, why couldn't she?

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    1. LocomenteSeptember 20, 2013 10:56 am

      In the same way how her father saw her grow up..

      Thanks a lot :)

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  10. AnonymousSeptember 20, 2013 3:46 am

    The fact is that life deals many uneven hands to us. The best we can do is make the best of it. A poignant story.

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  11. AnonymousSeptember 20, 2013 3:56 pm

    Dear Satya,

    This is why I believe in reincarnation. Selfless love must be rewarded. Great story.

    Aloha,


    Doug

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  12. AnonymousSeptember 22, 2013 6:33 am

    Locomente, you are not quite so Loco as you claim.

    The selfless life will always be payed forward. Always.

    Touching story!

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    1. LocomenteSeptember 22, 2013 10:15 am

      Thanks a lot...
      Hoping that it gets paid off before it is too late!

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